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~You guys have guessed a lot of characters, and only five got it right. I'm really impressed with all of you and I think you've waited long enough for the next part.~


Ben's POV

Its been a week since (Name) came to live with me. I was a little nervous about introducing her to the others. Slender was ok with it, but I was worried about how the others would react. Especially Zalgo. I don't think I can have those two meet at all. Zalgo hates humans, and me and him aren't exactly friends. He'll kill her without even thinking about what he was doing. I can't let that happen. Oh wait....there's one more person who might want to kill (Name) too. Jane. And any friend of Jeff's is an enemy of hers. Maybe if I tell them one at a time, they might not kill her.

I left (Name) at the house and went to look for the others. A few minutes later I ran into Jeff. "Hey Ben." he said. "Hi Jeff." He was leaning against a tree, sharpening his knife. "So how's your girlfriend?" he ask. "She's fi-...wait. How do you know I have a girlfriend?" "Slender told me." "What? Has he told anyone else?" "Yup. He told everyone. Except for Zalgo." I didn't know if should be mad or grateful. "Ok....I guess that means I don't to tell anyone. Since Slendy did that for me." I turned around to leave. "Hey Ben?" I turned back around. "Yeah?" "You know what's up with Rake?" "Rake? No, why?" "He's been acting weird lately. Like he's pissed off about something." "Well if he is, I don't know what? Are sure he's not mad at you for stealing his kills?" I joked. "That's another weird thing, he hasn't gone killing all week." "Say what?" The Rake was a killing machine. He wouldn't even go a day without at least killing one human. But going a whole week without spilling blood. That's not normal for him. "You heard me. He hasn't killed in a week. He just stays in the woods looking really pissed off. Slender tried talking to him, but he won't tell us what's going on. So I thought you knew." "Nope." What's wrong with him? "Well I gotta get going." I said. "Ok. See ya."

I turned around and headed back to the house. I didn't want to leave (Name) alone for too long.

Your POV

I was outside in front of the house getting some fresh air. I was about to go back inside when I got the feeling I was being watch. "Hello (Name)." said a sinister voice. I spun around and saw a demonic creature with long claws. I then remembered an article I read about a creature with long claws called The Rake. I stepped backwards only to end up tripping over something and falling on my back. Now The Rake was only inches away from me. I squeezed my eyes shut as I remembered how he killed. "You look so cute when your afraid." he said. "I could just eat. You. U- AHHHHHH" I opened my eyes only to see Ben punching Rake in the face. Sending him flying feet away from us.

As soon as Ben helped me to my feet, he pushed me behind him. "I don't care how long its been since you've killed someone Rake!" he yell. "But your not getting near (Name)!" The Rake growled as he looked at Ben. "If you think I'm just gonna sit here and let you take what's mine, you'd better think again you elf!" Rake yelled. "What the hell are you talking about?" Ben asked. "She's mine Ben! And I'm not gonna let you, or anyone else stand in my way!"

I suddenly hear growling from above us. I looked up to see a tall creature. Taller than Slenderman, with black long hair, and big, blank white eyes. It walked over me and Ben, so we were standing underneath it. "Perfect timing Strider." Ben said. Rake just growled and ran away. Strider stepped back and look down at use. His growl was replaced with a purr. It was actually kinda cute. He then turned and left. Ben and I went back inside the house.

Ben's POV

Great, now Rake wants to kill (Name). What did he mean by 'She's mine?' Does he want to be only one to kill her? Or does he.......oh no.
Yay Part 5. So what do you guys think?
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:iconlilasascha:
Lilasascha Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
wow dose rake wannna rape MEEEEEH !?!?!??!?!?
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ZariaQuartz Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2015
Rake is your antagonist? Poor thing, you need to give him a partner, he must be lonely
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:iconenderwolfpro:
EnderWolfPro Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2015
NOOOOOO
I WAS WRONG!!!!!
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:iconanonymouskittens:
AnonymousKittens Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2015  New Deviant
Lol Rake was my first guess so I did it!!!!!!
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:iconhalfdemonblairx:
HalfDemonBlairx Featured By Owner Edited Mar 1, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
??? Where is part 6? I can't find it!! T.T

Oh wait... I got it! Yay!!
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2015   Writer
YAY
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wolfraingirlhunter Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2015
oh dear, something is telling me that something bad is going to happen just hope Ben Drowned and Reader are o.k. and Just hope that Ben, is o.k. with fighting with the Rake
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2015   Writer
Yes
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:iconwolfraingirlhunter:
wolfraingirlhunter Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2015
is he one of those kinds of things that, like to kill and eat other humans, 'a man-eater' if you well 
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:icongogowinter:
Gogowinter Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2015
Not rake I have nightmares about him because my freind showed me a gruesome one about him ahhhhh nightmares
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JinxTheSphynx Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2015
Same xc
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2015   Writer
AAAAHHHHH
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:iconmidnightrainbowfire:
MidnightRainbowFire Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Rake? Dafuq o_0 he needs to take his bald ass somewhere else =_=
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:iconask-cali-and-others:
Ask-Cali-and-others Featured By Owner May 10, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That shut-down do XD
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:icongogowinter:
Gogowinter Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2015
Fur sure
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kotadog88 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
exactly midnight
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2015   Writer
None likes rake
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MetalBladez00940902 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2015
((OH F*CK NO I AIN'T GONNA KISS MY WORST NIGHTMARE, BEN'S NOW MAH FAVE. THE RAKE F*CKING SCARES THE LIVING HELL OUTTA ME SO BAD I KEEP SAYING IF I WAKE UP TO HIM IN MY ROOM ONE NIGHT I'M GONNA HAVE MY COUSIN HIT HIM WITH A METAL BASEBALL BAT AND THEN I'LL THROW HIM OUT THE F*CKING WINDOW!!! I DON'T CARE IF OUR HOUSE IS RENTED, I'LL SAY IT WAS A REINDEER!!!))
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HalfDemonBlairx Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
...Woah...!...Calm down.. 0_0
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:iconmetalbladez00940902:
MetalBladez00940902 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2015
((Forget my potty-mouth.))
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:iconhalfdemonblairx:
HalfDemonBlairx Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Haha XD ((that was awesome what you said btw)) i was surprised hahah :D you know, i have to say, you. are. so. awesome!! XD
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MetalBladez00940902 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2015
((I am? I find myself to be highly obnoxious at times and very annoying when I'm hyper.))
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:iconhalfdemonblairx:
HalfDemonBlairx Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hahah really? I think you're okay~! *hugs* :D
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:iconmetalbladez00940902:
MetalBladez00940902 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2015
((*spaz-attack* I GOT CALLED AWESOME AND I GOT AN INTERNET HUG. *falls backwards and lands on the floor then holds up a cookie* HERE'S AN INTERNET COOKIE.))
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:iconhalfdemonblairx:
HalfDemonBlairx Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hahahahahah!!!! Look who's happy now~ :D
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Mizomim Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2015   Writer
0_0
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:iconmetalbladez00940902:
MetalBladez00940902 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2015
((LOL))
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:iconwolfgal23:
wolfgal23 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
When you said it wasn't everybody with j I thought the rake and read on to see I was right
Yay😇
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2014   Writer
Yay
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Needsmorerainbows2 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014
Where's the 6 part
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014   Writer
want a link?
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:iconneedsmorerainbows2:
Needsmorerainbows2 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014
Sure thanks
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Chizuru-the-Hedgehog Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
BAD RAKE!!!!!!!! I NOT YOURS!!!!!!! I'M BEN'S!!!!!!!!! 0W0
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014   Writer
0w0
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:iconchizuru-the-hedgehog:
Chizuru-the-Hedgehog Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
O.O WHY THE RAKE?!?!?!?!?!!? T.T APPARENTLY WHOEVER READS THIS IS WORTH FIGHTING THE RAKE FOR...............WAIT.......CREEPYPASTAS WE'RE FIGHTING OVER MEH!!!!!!
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2014   Writer
lol
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:iconcupcakelover466:
cupcakelover466 Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2014
All these new characters  I only knew about BEN sally slendy Jeff ej and LJ so much information!
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2014   Writer
haha
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:iconcupcakelover466:
cupcakelover466 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014
Lol
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Rainbowgirl546 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
ME- who is this rake dude any who's? 
Creepypasta fan- U DONT KNOW WHO THE RAKE IS,HOW DO U NOT KNOW WHO IS! DERP!0_o
ME- well I don't, because unlike you. I don't read creepy pastas all day and all night. Seriously dude who do you sleep at night?! T_T
creepypasta fan-But EVERYONE know who he is.
rake- yeah, I'm flipping famous!
ME- well excuse me....T3T
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MetalBladez00940902 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2015
((Idiot: What's a Creepypasta?
Me: SIT YO ASS DOWN, N****, IT'S STORY TIME.))
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014   Writer
lol
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heroinemeh Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw shit can't find part 6! 😭😱
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:iconheroinemeh:
heroinemeh Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank youu <3
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animefanbookworm Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014  Student General Artist
.........oh no *(cue the DUN DUN DUUUUUUUUUUUUUNNNNN!!!!!!)* XD
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2014   Writer
:icondundundunplz:
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:iconanimefanbookworm:
animefanbookworm Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Student General Artist
XD
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frog6 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Student Artist
Awwwwwwww fuck. Not the Rake.
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