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When I woke up the next morning, Ben was gone. But he left a note. I picked it up off the pillow and it said. 'Dear (Name), I'm sorry I had to leave, but I didn't want to wake you. I left to get our new home ready for you, but I should be back soon. XOXO Love, Ben'

I put the note back down and checked the time. It was 9:03 so I decided to just go back to sleep. But then I shot up into a sitting potion remembering it was a school day. 'Wait, I'm leaving with Ben. I don't have to go to school. I'm already two hours late anyway.' I lay back down on my bed when I hear a someone pounding on my door. "WAKE UP YOU LIITLE BITCH YOUR LATE!" I hear my sister yell. "WHY THE HELL DO YOU CARE?!" I yell back. "BECAUSE IF YOUR ASS DOSN'T GO TO SCHOOL TODAY WHO DO THINK MOM AND DAD ARE GONNA YELL AT?!" "THERE DRUNK 24/7 THERE NOT GONNA CARE!" My sister can be a real dumbass when it comes to our parents. I bet there not even here. "Just go to work already!" I said trying to calm down. "Fine!" she said in a more clam voice. I heard the front door slam shut. "Bitch." I said out loud. "You can say that again."

I looked to the left and saw Ben standing in front of my desk. I jump out of bed and hug him. "Hey my little gamer girl. How'd you sleep?" he said. "Gamer girl?" I asked. "What I can't give you a cute nick name?" I laughed a little before kissing his cheek. "Sooo....you ready?" he asked. I nodded as I went to get my bag. I didn't take a lot, just enough for me to carry. Ben picked me up bridal and style. And we were off.

Going through the computer, it felt...weird. But we stopped as seconds after we jumped in. Ben put me down and I started to look around. We were in a pretty big room with a queen sized bed and the walls were a bluish color. "Is this where you live?" I asked. "Where we live." he said wrapping his arms around my waste from behind. Ben showed me around the house. He said it used to be someone's vacation home, before he killed them. It was nice and it was by a lake. I walked out side and sat on the front steps of the house. Ben sat next to me. "Ben." "Yes?" "I love you." "I love you too (Name)." He gently cupped my face and kissed me. At that moment I felt like nothing could go wrong in my life.

???? POV

No no no no no no NO! This isn't happening! This! ISN'T! HAPPENING! UHH! IT'S NOT FAIR! I  saw her first! (Name) was suppose to be MINE! I'm the one that loves her! NOT HIM! Damn you Ben! Think you can just walk in here and take what's rightfully mine?! I DON'T THINK SO!
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~ Before you all start guessing on who it is, let me relieve you with some clues. It's not Eyeless Jack. It's not Laughing Jack. And it's not Jeff.......and I just realized all their names start with J's. Anyway.... you will find who it is in the next chapter and if you guess right I will let you know and reward you. And yes all these guys will be in the story at some point but until than please comment and tell me what you think. ~
Go ahead and guess away.
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:iconazly09:
AZLY09 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2015  Student Artist
Rake
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:iconapollosmoon:
Apollosmoon Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2015  New Deviant Hobbyist Writer
If its seedeater, zalgo, strangled redd, or masky, I'm gonna slap a bitch.
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:iconbutterwolf134:
ButterWolf134 Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2015

WARNING! Carry on reading! Or you will die, even if you only looked at the word warning! Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lived in a mental hospital, because she killed her mom and her dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that best idea was to get rid of her so they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died. Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that reads this letter, on a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on this one site, and she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake. apparently, if you copy and paste this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life tomorrow.You will either get kissed or asked out, if you break this chain u will see a little dead girl in you

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:iconlittlekat99:
littlekat99 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2015
I'm not gonna do this because I would rather sacrifice myself then wish it upon someone else.
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:iconanimaultria:
AnimaUltria Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2015
Dont read~ New member
WARNING! Carry on reading! Or you will die, even if you only looked at the word warning! Once there was a little girl called Clarissa, she was ten-years-old and she lived in a mental hospital, because she killed her mom and her dad. She got so bad she went to kill all the staff in the hospital so the More-government decided that best idea was to get rid of her so they set up a special room to kill her, as humane as possible but it went wrong the machine they were using went wrong. And she sat there in agony for hours until she died. Now every week on the day of her death she returns to the person that reads this letter, on a Monday night at 12:00 a.m. She creeps into your room and kills you slowly, by cutting you and watching you bleed to death. Now send this to ten other pictures on this one site, and she will haunt someone else who doesn't. This isn't fake. apparently, if you copy and paste this to ten comments in the next ten minutes you will have the best day of your life tomorrow.You will either get kissed or asked out, if you break this chain u will see a little dead girl in you((this is not mine, I didn't come up with this.. I was told to only pass this along when I saw this in a comments event...sorry ))
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Ask-cute-BEN-DROWNED Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2015  Student Artist
I thought Ben and me (kinda weird saying that but anyways) were gonna go to it in the morning and then the sister be like: Wake up you slutty bitch!!! Sis... Sis...? Mom and dad are gonna kill me... Literatley
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:iconenderwolfpro:
EnderWolfPro Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2015
Masky
Hoody
Ticci Toby
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:iconanonymouskittens:
AnonymousKittens Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2015
Rake
Smiledog
Seedeater
Smexy(Sexual Offenderman)
Trenderman
Splendorman
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:icontrulyparanormal:
TrulyParanormal Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2015
"Before he killed them"
why did i laugh so hard at this
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:icondragonwolf505:
Dragonwolf505 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
No J wuvs...
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2015   Writer
No wuvs....
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:iconflameprincelover:
flamePrincelover Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2015
Rake
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2015   Writer
maybe
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:icongogowinter:
Gogowinter Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2015
Like the 3 musketeers but the j's
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:iconask-cute-ben-drowned:
Ask-cute-BEN-DROWNED Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2015  Student Artist
Lol
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015   Writer
yes
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:icongogowinter:
Gogowinter Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2015
Haha I just relized there names start with js someone should wright a creepypasta called the js
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2015   Writer
js?
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:iconmidnightrainbowfire:
MidnightRainbowFire Featured By Owner Edited Jan 21, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
At first when I started reading this story I was just like "Normal fanfiction romance...." but then I finished this chapter and thought "Shit just got real! I love this!"
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2015   Writer
YAY
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:iconkattheemo:
KatTheEmo Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2014
Those are exactly the people i guessed before reading the last part. And im here like "damnit... God damnit.... WHAT THE HELL!"
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2014   Writer
WTH
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:iconask-vixy-the-fox1987:
Ask-Vixy-the-Fox1987 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I guess its............ Ticci Toby? Hoodie? Masky?!
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2014   Writer
keep going
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:iconask-vixy-the-fox1987:
Ask-Vixy-the-Fox1987 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Zalgo, slendy, jack, seed eater,smiley, offender, red!?
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2014   Writer
nope
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:iconask-vixy-the-fox1987:
Ask-Vixy-the-Fox1987 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2014  Student Digital Artist
:shrug:
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:iconlemonlime36:
LemonLime36 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2014
With that hyperness I'm guessing toby?? (I didn't even look at anyone else's comment so this is fully my own guess :3)
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2014   Writer
LOL
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:iconlemonlime36:
LemonLime36 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2014
....and nevermind then -.- I'm never right at guessing games
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:iconlemonlime36:
LemonLime36 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2014
Absolutely. NEVER.
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:iconfelishathewolf1:
felishathewolf1 Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Rake???? :iconrakeplz:
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2014   Writer
LOL
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:iconfelishathewolf1:
felishathewolf1 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2014  Student Digital Artist
:iconrakeplz:
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:icongoldenhorns2332:
Goldenhorns2332 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
My guess is the rake.
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2014   Writer
Ok
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:icongreycoat95:
GreyCoat95 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Is it Masky or Hoodie? Or maybe Ticci Toby?
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2014   Writer
who knows......
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:iconjeffythekiller123:
Jeffythekiller123 Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014   Traditional Artist
is it rake???????!!!!
im guessing, but ima loose so.....its worth a shot.
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2014   Writer
go and see....
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:iconcomedywiz411:
Comedywiz411 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
After I read ???? POV: Its either one of the Jacks, or Jeff

After reading author's note: .... Well, f**k my theories, I'm never right...
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:iconkattheemo:
KatTheEmo Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2014
Same here XD
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014   Writer
oh well keep guessing
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:iconsamanthavonsnuffles:
samanthavonsnuffles Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Masky or hoodie?
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
neither
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:iconsamanthavonsnuffles:
samanthavonsnuffles Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
oh noooo is it slendy...?
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:iconkiuoyh:
kiuoyh Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014
rake?
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:iconmizomim:
Mizomim Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2014   Writer
......maybe
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:iconsomebody772:
Somebody772 Featured By Owner May 21, 2014
I'll give myself three chances;
1. Masky
2. Hoodie
3. Zalgo.
Yes. I did write Zalgo, mostly because i know im not gonna have any guesses right, so why try?
~Makesnosenseatall XD
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